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the  talk 

        of           my 

                            heart
                                          unfurls,

                                                        wisps
    
                                                       of        smoke
    
                                                tangled in my          voice,
    
                                              strangled along your         chest;
    
                                                tonight we spend our seconds
    
                                                    deliquescing our desires
    
                                                        into wicks for flames
    
                                                                         yet to be        lit,
    
                                                       and still i dare seek the             fumes   
    
                                                 pressed in your stare- gasoline for my       lips
    
                                                  to infuriate the stagnant caliber that is      your
 
                                                      wish; dare for your fingers to ignite          me
    
                                                              the ache in your moans to          align me
    
                                                                         a constellation in your  mattress;
    
                                                                               i wait for you to covet 

                                                                                             your wants,
   
                                                                                                      but    you 

                                                                                               and  i       flicker out;
   
                                                                                             a candle   in the night

                                                                                                  waiting    to be
      
                                                                                                             re-
                                                                                                             lit
i don't usually like when people write these but it was fun
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fumes by *KaitForest powerfully enforces the words through the image, rather than the image through the words. ( Suggested by AzizrianDaoXrak and Featured by Nichrysalis )
:iconunspecifiedunknown:
UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013   Writer
congrats on this love :heart:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
thank you <3
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:icontravelgirlxx:
travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
You've been featured: [link]

Keep up the fabulous work!!
:heart:


(and P.S. - I normally am not one for typography, but this rocks!!)
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013   Writer
thank you, lovely!
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:icontravelgirlxx:
travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
:heart:
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:icon1000themes:
1000Themes Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
The spaces made me really appreciate this poem

I.

Was. Reading.


With.

A


Stam . mer

:XD:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013   Writer
:)
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
This is amazing! Excellent job and congrats on the DD!
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012   Writer
thanks love! <3
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:iconateendra:
Ateendra Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
Fudge, this is so awesome. :D
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012   Writer
thank you! <3
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:iconmist-stavi:
MiSt-Stavi Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
wow this is so beautiful in the eyes as also as a literature!so beautiful DD!!
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012   Writer
thank you :)
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:iconblueberrytsu:
BlueberryTsu Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
The way it is written down reminds me of e.e. cummings style poems.
I like it!
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012   Writer
thanks love!
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:iconalberthein1:
Alberthein1 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
That's a nice vocabulary usage right there...
Nicely done. Did you first go pick an image and make a poem for it, or the other way around?
Or maybe the whole thing just spawned in your head?
How did you get this the way it is now?
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
it spawned in my head. it started with the lines, the first two i wrote them normally, and then the image came. slowly made it into something, and i didn't think the image that was flowing was going to make any sense in relation to the words, but it did. sometimes it works out like that, you know? thanks love :)
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:iconalberthein1:
Alberthein1 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
That's quite an interesting flow of creative thought.
Many works start out small and unintended, which is exactly why people say that the road thowards the destination is atleast equally important as the result.
Thanks for your answer ^^
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
Congratulations on the DD! The poetic visualization is extraordinary.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thank you!
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:iconarchelyxs:
archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Congrats on the DD! :heart:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thank you!
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Incredible! The words were carefully chosen, and the concrete aspect is wonderful. I applaud you. :hug:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thank you:)
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :hug:
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
kait!! o:
congratulations on the DD! :heart:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thanks love :)
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome (:
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:iconliyaperfidious:
liyaperfidious Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
I like the shape.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
i think i do, too <3
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:iconxxjackiepackiexo:
xxJackiePackiexo Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazingly adorable <3 <3 :tighthug:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thank you!
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:iconxxjackiepackiexo:
xxJackiePackiexo Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome :tighthug:
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:iconcmwvisualarts:
CMWVisualArts Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The words look like they form the shape of a feather pen. :noes:
Wonderful poetry, of course.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
:noes:
thank you!
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:icondragonlover4ever:
DragonLover4Ever Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
MAH GOODNESS!

This is absolutely amazing!
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
wah thanks love!
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:icondragonlover4ever:
DragonLover4Ever Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! You definitely deserve it!
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! :D
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thanks! <3
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:iconsrudy:
SRudy Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
That's awesome :heart:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
:)
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:iconemilygolightly:
emilygolightly Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Writer
whoooo DD! congratulations, this deserves it. curvy and dreamy
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thanks love!
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:iconcharmed-ravenclaw:
Charmed-Ravenclaw Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That is awesomely done!
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thank you!
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:iconchriseastmids:
chriseastmids Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
wonderful
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   Writer
thanks :D
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:iconchriseastmids:
chriseastmids Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
anytime :-)
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Wooltree Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Beautiful poem and the shape just carried the words so well. Congrats on the DD
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