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tell me, boy
who is your god.

do not say it
is the limbs

that spread you
between knowing
and comfort;

do not tell me it is
hands wrapping a head
board, nor a mouth
tugging your name
for salvation.

i want to know who it is
that makes you lucent,
bent beneath the dark,
weeping,

because there is no divinity
like the one that makes
you bleed
:iconkaitforest:

i haven't forgotten by KaitForest

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a poem i wrote a while ago, resent to me the other day by =KissTheSunrise
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:iconwinterkate:
winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Student Writer
WHY ARE YOU SO GOOD.

I missed your work when I was gone. 
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014   Writer
:love: thank you!
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so wonderful, Kait. And I'm mighty glad Ms. Megan resent this to ya so we can all enjoy it.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013   Writer
thank you so much :heart: yes i'm very glad she did.
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, love. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
in the last strophe, did you mean the one who makes you bleed or was that intentional? either way, this poem is almost chilling--and remarkably true.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013   Writer
i'm afraid to ask what the difference is :B 
would it make a difference if it were who (verses that)?
thank you :3

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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
this is a stunner
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013   Writer
thank you :meow:
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:iconjohntanner:
JohnTanner Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
Divinity makes you bleed? Hah?
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
hah?
shall we bring up the past religions that have used sacrifice as means to please the gods or no
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:iconjohntanner:
JohnTanner Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Professional General Artist
Satanism? Mayan cult?
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013   Writer
greeks? romans? jews? asian cultures? african cultures? aborigines (american and australian) cultures?
endless
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:iconjohntanner:
JohnTanner Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Professional General Artist
Are they still practiced?
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013   Writer
do they have to be?
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:iconjohntanner:
JohnTanner Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Professional General Artist
Depends on your definition of "fun for the whole family".
That wasn't funny i guess.
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ScottDouglass Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Jesus Christ! Insightful and powerful. Methinks the god he worships is none other than Medusa, whom he has mistaken for...the Mother of God.

Don't ask how I know that...
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
thank you <3
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Student Writer
"tell me, boy
who is your god

because there is no divinity
like the one that makes
you bleed"


:heart:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
:iconheartredplz:
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:icondiddlyhohum:
diddlyhohum Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh kait how i've missed you
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
:love: you are so lovely
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful! Every word delivers. That ending in particular is gold. :+fav:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
thank you :meow:
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:iconblue-midnight-angel:
Blue-Midnight-Angel Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Unique.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
:meow:
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:iconcupcakeproof:
CupcakeProof Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
Amazing! It would be interesting to know the thought behind it.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
i was particularly curious of a certain someone's religion, and the thoughts that came with my curiosity aligned themselves in a poem format, and instead of actually asking them i wrote this poem
thank you! :meow:
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Adravis Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013
because there is no divinity
like the one that makes
you bleed

Sounds like a pretty disparaging view of their religion, am I reading that right?
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:iconadravis:
Adravis Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
I second that, this is dark and beautiful, I'm really curious if I'm taking the same meaning from it that you intended. 
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:iconssensory:
ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013   Writer
this is beyond amazing.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
:iconnouplz:
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:iconssensory:
ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
:iconyesyouplz:
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tospiteyourface Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is gorgeous. lucent is a criminally underused word.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
criminally is an underused word, and i would agree. thank you!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Professional Writer
Excellent. love the end.
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013   Writer
thank you <3
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