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he reads to her, tells her what it was like to be a sailor of the seas on the moon. "don't stop talking," she tells him, dozing off, imagining the seas of zephyr. 

spyglass on the moon a million miles away, the ether shatters by a little girl on her toes, standing on her mattress, clinging to her window above. stain glass eyes in the wake of moon and she breathes as the sea slamming onto the pane, receding and reaching; clouding and clearing. her breaths reach the moon and the moon reaches back with her hands pressed to the girl's eyes.

"one day," she tells the moon, the boy still at her bedside, "you and i will be together."

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:iconmina12310:
mina12310 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student General Artist
The way you paint with your words <3
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013   Writer
:love: 
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Stunning words. A real pleasure to read. Well done!
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013   Writer
thank you!
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome! :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Kait le poet.. err.. prose.. uhm writer !! (:  This is much nicer than you think, I think. lol  Congrats on the DD !!  :hooray:
You deserve a dozen or so of those for your "other" works, but I'm happy you got this one. :heart:
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013   Writer
i definitely agree it would be more deserving on another work. i feel like the works i do get dd's on are not deserving at all... ah oh well. thank you <3
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
wait.. i didn't say that.  at least i didn't mean to say that. i meant you deserve many
more of them because you have so many deserving works.

you're welcome! :heart:
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013   Writer
:love:
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
I seem to be coming across a lot of your work lately and it's all very lovely. This one especially caught my attention for some reason; I really like it!
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013   Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
You're welcome:)
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Writermind Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well written. :-)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
I'm glad I read this, though I did a bit late. You put a lot of poetry in your prose, but I'd guess you know it.
This leaves a lot to the imagination, which I like. Congrats on the DD. Thank you.
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
it's funny you should mention "poetry." i wrote this during a time i was obsessively reading a lot of poets. i think that "poetry" language definitely influenced the way i wrote this and a few other pieces. i can't decide if i prefer it to the normal way i write/prefer prose or not. thank you! :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
You're very welcome.
A poetic influence is pretty obvious to me. Often poetic phrases come from reading a lot of poetry and writing prose soon after.
Agree? I think so.
As for any decision, it's up to you, but I like both forms myself. I even like "prosetry," though that's not listed much.
I also really like straight-up prose. Oh, heck. I just like good writing! (:
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LasarDaddy Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Hi,

It took me a couple of minutes to think through it, but I really like that.

Paul
Windsor, California
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Concora Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
Oh, lovely. Congratulations on the DD! :clap: :heart:
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LowlyWorm Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your description: what
Your reaction the the DD: what
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
that's exactly why i put "what" in my description haha
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Lovely work! :heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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fervvent Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
congrats on the DD :heart: you definitely deserve it
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Invisible-Neko Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
BELARUS? IS THAT YOU? ._.
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
I WANT TO LAUGH OR SOMETHING BUT I DON'T GET IT
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
very sweet and beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   General Artist
congratulations on the DD, love! :tighthug: :heart:
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dollycat7 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Professional General Artist
beautiful and inspiring !!!!!
congrats on the DD ....
XXD
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ShonaliKapoor Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Congratulations on the DD! :hug:
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD, my dear! Well deserved, it's such a beautiful piece and I love the imagery. :heart:
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
thank you! :heart:
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely! :heart: Congrats on the feature. Glad I got to read this! :happybounce: 
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kinkyDivers Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
wow so nice to read but still made me think of hope
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maduch Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
nice
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vanmall Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :happybounce:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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zakir-hossain Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
nice
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Rayckro Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Congratulation on the Daily Deviation! :D
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Most pieces in something resembling this style - poetic, deeply descriptive kind-of prose - suffer from being to dense to find the images that are really most important. This does not have that ailment at all. It's great, and I could feel what it meant the first time - yet, I still keep catching new details as I re-read it, like "seas of zephyr" or "on her toes."

Probably the single line that stood out the most to me initially though was "spyglass on the moon a million miles away."
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
i love this comment. thank you, love :heart:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad!
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Savaliste Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
SO AWESOME congratz!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013   Writer
"one day," she tells the moon, the boy still at her bedside, "you and i will be together."

this gave me fucking chills
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
no one has even read this i thought this was terrible
i am glad it did <3
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